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It was an eerie Tuesday afternoon. The sky was gray, and the mood was dark. I was standing in front of my school, waiting for my Mom to pick me up. I came across some girls, who simply looked back at me and laughed. I stood behind a tree, listening to my iPod.
I glanced over to the other side of the bus bay. I saw a teenage boy; he was heavy set, wearing a white jumper and dark pants. He was giving me death stares. “What?” I yelled. He showed no emotion, and was closed off.
Feeling paranoid, I reached for my phone in my bag. He was walking towards me. I started walking in the opposite direction, down a old, dirt road. I called my friend, who took the first bus from school. “Ah, there’s some guy following me; he looks really, really freaky…” – “What? Are you serious? Walk away!” – “I am!” – “Well, run!” I started to run further and further away.
He continued to follow me. “I can’t keep on running – I’m feeling exhausted!” – “I have to go now – my stop’s here, I have to get off…” – “Okay, he’s still following me – I don’t know what to do!” I hung up the phone, and put it in my pocket.
I ran towards the main road, gasping for air. I turned around, petrified; and he was gone. I looked around, and he was nowhere in sight. I reached for my phone in my pocket, and it had disappeared.
Panicking, I started searching the ground for my phone. I couldn’t find it anywhere – it had vanished! I looked up, and I saw a wolf-type creature. I screamed and started running for my life.
It ran faster and faster, I started running for my life, until everything came to a halt. It grabbed me by my neck and strangled my throat. It made disturbing sounds while doing so.
I thought I was going to die; until suddenly, I could no longer see anything. I had lost all sound, sight and feelings. Everything turned black.
I woke up in an old, wooden house. The foundation of the house was completely demolished, no walls, flooring or furniture were to be seen in sight.
I got up, and felt the floor beneath me creek. I walked over to the window, where I saw a blanket box with a teddy bear sitting on it. The teddy bear had multi-colors, and was quite large. The eyes of the teddy bear were round and dark, with tiny specs of white in the pupil. It blinked twice. I was star struck, and walked over to the window. I kept my distance from the teddy, but I was very curious.
Outside, I saw several people with white masks (with no breathing holes), but wore regular everyday clothes. There was a little girl who had curly blonde hair, a pretty pink dress, and a pretty pink bow. She also had a white mask, but was acting like a normal child.
One of the men turned around and started to stare at me. He pointed at me, and said something to the others. I panicked, and sat straight down beneath the window…